Review: Everflame


2 stars

Read from December 15 to 25, 2015 — I own a copy

Blurb: Long ago, when the earth was young. . . Four ancient beings created man to be the bastion of the earth and its creatures. But when The Great Tyrant came and chased The Ancients away, the world was transformed into a place of fear and isolation. Over time humans lost the connection they had with a world they had been created to protect. Now, deep in the forests that surround Gray Mountain, two bears find a small child that is abandoned and left for dead. They name him Evercloud, and raise him as a member of their kingdom. Teaching him the secrets of the elders, they tell him of the ancient beings that created man and the rumors of their return. Evercloud must now go on a quest to return The Ancients to power. However, in another corner of the land, a man known only as The Messenger travels the land under a white hood, on a mission to prevent the return of The Ancients. We follow the paths each of these men take until their stories collide in an epic battle of good versus evil.

Bookish Things: 260 pages. The cover looks indie made and could do with a professional update. This is book 1 in 4 part series.

Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.78 and paperback for $17.37

My Review: 

Ever read a book and really liked the plot, some of the characters, and the world, but were so let down by the overall finish of the book?

Everflame is that for me.

It has too many loose threads, appallingly bad editing and is rather long-winded.

I chose not to list all the editing errors in this book, because I felt that I’d remove myself from an otherwise interesting story. There were times that the typos and poor grammar really threw me out of the story, but for most of them, I was able to overlook them after a moment’s agitation. It’s a testament to how bad the grammar and spelling is, when it takes me 10 days to read a 260 page book.

The loose threads included many little things, but the worst was the bear culture that Evercloud enters as a small child. The bears very rarely act like bears. In fact, they speak and act more like humans than some of the human characters. I’d have liked to see greater use of the animalistic bear nature, as well as using some advanced technology.

The idea that a child raised by bears can then enter human civilization and actually pass for a human was amusing. Only in the clearly laughable and utterly unlikely way… I think that too many coincidences and good luck happened for Evercloud and his crew.

Also, the way in which the characters got higher powers was all too easy. Especially when it came to Evercloud and his crew. I really disliked how easy The Tyrant and his Messenger had it. I also wish that the break in the story to cover Edgar’s childhood and development was like being doused in cold water. Things were just starting to get interesting with Evercloud and the reader is thrown into a new story (even though it does tie in with Evercloud’s story – it’s not immediately obvious).

Ultimately, there’s a great idea here, but the execution of it was poor. I wouldn’t bother paying for this, if you’re intrigued, obtain it for free if possible. I won’t be continuing with the series.