Synopsis: Part one of three of the journey of a man in search of his first love, but ends up propelled on a wild quest. Where he finds love, faces loss and overcomes inevitable odds.
Bookish Things: 42 pages. The Cover is reasonable, but doesn’t tell you much about the book.
Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.92.
The list of issues I encountered in this 42 page story is almost longer than the story itself.
If you are thinking about being a writer, publishing books, please do not do what this author has done, and publish something that is barely but a first draft. EDIT YOUR WORK! Get someone else who is good at writing or editing to look it over.
Worst example of a story I’ve read so far! The only redeeming features, are the fact it was only 42 pages long and the fact that I paid nothing for it!
Things I noticed:
Issues including overuse of the same word in close sentences:
‘Very well’ is used excessively.
‘Tree, deal, wall, Sapphire’ all repeated too much.
‘You will perish a long painful, agonising death.’
There’s only four words too many in that sentence.
Changes in POV mid paragraph.
Use of ‘He seen’. Wrong!
Some paragraphs are indented, while others not. This occurs the whole way through the story.
Continuity issues at 82%. The group fled with no supplies yet they unpacked supplies when they arrive at Taisai.
82% – wrong use of their:
‘The three sat their(there) for a moment…’
86% – if Taisai is the multicultural hub described when they arrived, why would their presence be unusual?
93% – WTF?!? That is horse shit!
Could a professionally edited book really need more editing? Imagine that you’ve had your book professionally edited, paid your money and are now confident that your book is going to pass the critic’s test. What if you submit it to an agent, an assessment service or maybe publish it and get feedback that says that…
Hundreds of books have been written on the art of writing. Here at last is a book by two professional editors to teach writers the techniques of the editing trade that turn promising manuscripts into published novels and short stories.
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For the life of me, I can’t work out how to reblog Tony’s blog post like I do other WordPress blogs (perhaps he’s not got that option turned on in his settings!?) but, I think all of you who plan to write fiction should have a read of this article.