Review: Inked by Everly Drummond


Inked

2 stars

Read on December 30, 2015 — I own a copy

Blurb: When Avery Carmichael decides to get a tattoo, she has no idea that she’ll be getting a lot more than she bargained for. When sexy tattoo artist, Brody Duncan, shows up at her door unannounced, Avery finds him hard to resist, but little does she know that she’s in for the ride of her life. The only question is can she hold on long enough to enjoy the ride? 18+ Contains explicit material. Erotic short fiction.

Bookish Things: 26 pages. The cover has been updated since I obtained a copy. The new one is softer than this. I quite like this cover.

Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.73 Continue reading

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Review: Drakhom Taboo II


DrakhomTaboo2

2 stars

Read on December 29, 2015

Blurb: As far as Bianca Conti was concerned, she’d lost a significant design project for her company because of Devon Slane. Specifically, because of an unfortunate incident prior to their meeting that wasn’t even her fault. Bianca would like nothing more than to bring that arrogant man down a few notches and extract revenge. Devon wanted spirited Bianca so much he declined her company’s bid, leaving her open to pursuit…to bend her to his will and teach her some of his Drakhom skills in bed.

Bookish Things: 27 pages. The cover is the same as the first and third books in the trilogy. Fitting to the story line.

Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $3.03 Continue reading

Review: Fidget


Fidget

2 stars

Read on December 26, 2015 — I own a copy

Blurb: The death of a small boys hamster bring back unpleasant memories…

Bookish Things: 8 pages. Another of Tony’s short stories that are easily consumed in a short 5-10 minute window.

Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.85

My Review: 

This is the lowest I’ve rated one of Tony’s pieces. I have read 16 of his novels and short stories, but this one just irritated me to no end. It wasn’t even the story, that was really interesting and I think would have got 4 stars if it weren’t for the repetitive narration of the child.

I just couldn’t get over the repetitiveness and the random capitalisation of words like ‘Get Mad’ or ‘For My Own Good’. I wanted to fix them, and it just threw me right out of the story.

This might be a perfect little tale for you if you’re not as sensitive to editing as I am.

Review: Everflame


Everflame

2 stars

Read from December 15 to 25, 2015 — I own a copy

Blurb: Long ago, when the earth was young. . . Four ancient beings created man to be the bastion of the earth and its creatures. But when The Great Tyrant came and chased The Ancients away, the world was transformed into a place of fear and isolation. Over time humans lost the connection they had with a world they had been created to protect. Now, deep in the forests that surround Gray Mountain, two bears find a small child that is abandoned and left for dead. They name him Evercloud, and raise him as a member of their kingdom. Teaching him the secrets of the elders, they tell him of the ancient beings that created man and the rumors of their return. Evercloud must now go on a quest to return The Ancients to power. However, in another corner of the land, a man known only as The Messenger travels the land under a white hood, on a mission to prevent the return of The Ancients. We follow the paths each of these men take until their stories collide in an epic battle of good versus evil.

Bookish Things: 260 pages. The cover looks indie made and could do with a professional update. This is book 1 in 4 part series.

Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.78 and paperback for $17.37

My Review: 

Ever read a book and really liked the plot, some of the characters, and the world, but were so let down by the overall finish of the book?

Everflame is that for me.

It has too many loose threads, appallingly bad editing and is rather long-winded.

I chose not to list all the editing errors in this book, because I felt that I’d remove myself from an otherwise interesting story. There were times that the typos and poor grammar really threw me out of the story, but for most of them, I was able to overlook them after a moment’s agitation. It’s a testament to how bad the grammar and spelling is, when it takes me 10 days to read a 260 page book.

The loose threads included many little things, but the worst was the bear culture that Evercloud enters as a small child. The bears very rarely act like bears. In fact, they speak and act more like humans than some of the human characters. I’d have liked to see greater use of the animalistic bear nature, as well as using some advanced technology.

The idea that a child raised by bears can then enter human civilization and actually pass for a human was amusing. Only in the clearly laughable and utterly unlikely way… I think that too many coincidences and good luck happened for Evercloud and his crew.

Also, the way in which the characters got higher powers was all too easy. Especially when it came to Evercloud and his crew. I really disliked how easy The Tyrant and his Messenger had it. I also wish that the break in the story to cover Edgar’s childhood and development was like being doused in cold water. Things were just starting to get interesting with Evercloud and the reader is thrown into a new story (even though it does tie in with Evercloud’s story – it’s not immediately obvious).

Ultimately, there’s a great idea here, but the execution of it was poor. I wouldn’t bother paying for this, if you’re intrigued, obtain it for free if possible. I won’t be continuing with the series.

Review: Clawbinder


Clawbinder

2 stars

Read on October 14, 2015 — I own a copy, read count: 1

Synopsis: Saira has been trained from birth for this: to battle one of the Great Ones and retrieve that precious prize. But Rajani is old and clever, and like the Great Rocs before her, she is wise to the ways of thieves. A fantasy short story.

“Clawbinder” was first published on Short-Story.Me! and is now available for the first time as an individual eBook. It also includes a short preview of the upcoming novelette “Night Feeders”, a supernatural western.

Bookish Things: 11 pages. The cover ties in with the story, but I think it could be improved on.

Where to buy: I got this as a freebie on Amazon in 2012. It is no longer available.

My Review: 

Bookshelves: 2-star-review, fantasy, indie-author, amazon-freebie

Clawbinder reads like the introduction or prologue to a much longer story. If this is the case, I think it reads fairly well. If it’s not going to form the opening pages to something larger then much work needs to be done for it to stand on its own.

There’s very little character development, or background information provided to fill in the glaring blanks in the story. As a short story prologue that’s ok, because the gaps will be filled by the detail in the rest of the novel… alone, that’s not ok.

I was left curious about the powers Saira possessed and how Rajani would react to the whole situation.

One thing to note, the synopsis/blurb says that the new kindle book comes with a preview of an upcoming novella “Night Feeders” but my copy didn’t have that. I did purchase my copy in 2012, and it appears that the change to the synopsis/blurb occurred in 2014. So I can’t comment on the preview.

Review: The Sorcerer’s Dragon


TheSorcerersDragon

2 stars

Read on September 23, 2015

Synopsis: A battle between a sorcerer and a dragon.

Bookish Things: 3 pages. The cover is not really relevant to the story and looks like it was made by the author.

Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.93

My Review: 

The Sorcerer’s Dragon is a short snippet of a story. One scene really.

You don’t know any information about who the sorcerer is or the dragon, or why they are battling. It leaves it open for the reader to fill in, but that in and of itself is problematic. It invites the reader to fill in gaps with information that may not fit with the story. It doesn’t give the reader enough to go on to develop informed content, that sits plausibly within the story. There’s just not enough to go on.

Readers are not given much location information, time, background information or even names of the characters. I decided that the dragon’s name was Fluffy and the sorcerer’s name was Bill. It made for a little bit of amusement while reading…

The writing is passable, but it contains a lot of easily fixable issues that fall into the basics of good writing – including lots of adverbs and reuse of the same words very close to each other in the writing.

Ultimately, this reads like a first draft and really needs some editing before publishing a copy should be even thought about. Good thing it was free on Amazon. I’d recommend it for those who want to have editing practice.