Synopsis: Part one of three of the journey of a man in search of his first love, but ends up propelled on a wild quest. Where he finds love, faces loss and overcomes inevitable odds.
Bookish Things: 42 pages. The Cover is reasonable, but doesn’t tell you much about the book.
Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.92.
The list of issues I encountered in this 42 page story is almost longer than the story itself.
If you are thinking about being a writer, publishing books, please do not do what this author has done, and publish something that is barely but a first draft. EDIT YOUR WORK! Get someone else who is good at writing or editing to look it over.
Worst example of a story I’ve read so far! The only redeeming features, are the fact it was only 42 pages long and the fact that I paid nothing for it!
Things I noticed:
Issues including overuse of the same word in close sentences:
‘Very well’ is used excessively.
‘Tree, deal, wall, Sapphire’ all repeated too much.
‘You will perish a long painful, agonising death.’
There’s only four words too many in that sentence.
Changes in POV mid paragraph.
Use of ‘He seen’. Wrong!
Some paragraphs are indented, while others not. This occurs the whole way through the story.
Continuity issues at 82%. The group fled with no supplies yet they unpacked supplies when they arrive at Taisai.
82% – wrong use of their:
‘The three sat their(there) for a moment…’
86% – if Taisai is the multicultural hub described when they arrived, why would their presence be unusual?
93% – WTF?!? That is horse shit!
Proofread and light edit in October 2015
Synopsis: A despicable crime carried out twenty years ago by a teenage gang. The proceeds of a heist hidden away. Chris Crosby was involved and could have intervened but he didn’t. So he is just as guilty. But where to hide? How about the most obvious place. He is a surveillance expert investigating organized crime in Merseyside – in particular the activities of an outfit led by Alison Mason who has had to take control when her partner was drowned in a botched drug smuggling operation. Chris is also a rock climber with ambitions to solo the hardest and most dangerous climb in the area, ‘Time Lapse’. Talk about not attracting attention to yourself. But the ghosts from his past have been awakened. Can Chris avoid exposure? Can he shop the gangsters? Can he climb – and survive – the route?
Bookish Things: 244 pages. The cover is striking and very apt.
Read from July 10 to 15, 2015
Synopsis: Bloody mistakes, ugly scars, and beautiful lies. A tale of corruption.
Helen Gardener is murdered on a trans-Atlantic cruise. The Diamond Royale sails from Southampton to New York with her murderer aboard. Set in the 1950s, Poisoned Waters follows the stories of seven unfortunate characters and how they are affected by her death. Was it merely an accident? Mr Phillips, the owner of the ship, and sponsor of the cruise, rules with an iron fist, in search of something or someone.
Lies spiral out of control as the suspects try to survive the final days on board. Conflicted by their sense of morals, greed, and lust, they realise what kind of people they really are. Who will rise? Who will fall? Who was Helen’s murderer?
What does a book editor do? I’ve written a lot of blog posts on the importance of the line edit that have included mentions of the four kinds of editing, but today I’m going to address the topic directly because it’s vital information. If you’re an author you need to know what the four kinds of editing…