Review: Inked by Everly Drummond


Inked

2 stars

Read on December 30, 2015 — I own a copy

Blurb: When Avery Carmichael decides to get a tattoo, she has no idea that she’ll be getting a lot more than she bargained for. When sexy tattoo artist, Brody Duncan, shows up at her door unannounced, Avery finds him hard to resist, but little does she know that she’s in for the ride of her life. The only question is can she hold on long enough to enjoy the ride? 18+ Contains explicit material. Erotic short fiction.

Bookish Things: 26 pages. The cover has been updated since I obtained a copy. The new one is softer than this. I quite like this cover.

Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.73

My Review: 

Inked is a 26 page erotic short story. It’s pretty much a couple of scenes between a woman who gets a tattoo and the tattoo artist that gives it to her.

It’s not a bad idea or necessarily a bad story, the characters are reasonable – if a little flat, but one expects that of titillation reads – but the execution was what killed it for me. There was some very basic writing things wrong with this, things like a lot of adverbs and adjectives that did nothing for the story. Also, there was a lot of repetition of the same words, a poor grasp on moving past the most basic sexual references and a lot of the content was cliche and has been done to death in the erotic industry.

I wouldn’t bother with this one if you can’t look past the above mentioned flaws, if you’re keen for a super quick read that’s reasonable (but does include anal on the first ‘date’), give this a try.

Things I noticed:
27% – …her curly blond(e) hair…
60% – …tightened as she as (delete she as) Brody…
64% – …kissed his was (delete s, replace with y) slowly…
69% – repetition of ‘ever growing pile of clothes’. Reword.
– repetition of ‘skilled mouth’.
– repetition of ‘moist opening’
– “(delete space)Come for me” also put dialogue onto a new line.
-…chocked – replace with choked
73% – dialogue on new line.
– “Oh God.” she(capitalise the s)
78% – “(delete space)Come for me…
83% – …such as (delete as, replace an) intimate spot…
-…causing the tip (of) Brody’s finger (to) penetrate…
87% – …slowly plunge(d) further…
– accustom(ed)
92% – …was great.” she(capitalise s)…

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2 thoughts on “Review: Inked by Everly Drummond

  1. Okay – is it bad that I laughed when you said “but does include anal on the first ‘date'”? Another great review 🙂

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