Review: Smokescreen


Smokescreen

3 stars

Read from September 09 to 15, 2014 — I own a copy

Synopsis: It starts in Washington when a lone gunman enters a busy burger chain and opens fire killing twenty five people. It continues in Paris, London, Sydney and Beijing. Authorities, including FBI agent Jack Rossi find no motive or any connection between the shootings causing fear and panic in the world’s major cities.
As Jack scrambles to get answers, he stumbles upon a secret world of hybrid humans, moles and a threat he never saw coming. One that could lead to the loss of an unprecedented number of lives. Including his own.

Bookish Things: 288 pages. The cover is quite lovely with a lot of subtle elements that pop out at you when you have a closer look at it.

Where to buy: On Smashwords for $3.99 and on Amazon on kindle for $3.91

My Review: 

Smokescreen is a crime/FBI procedural dipped thoroughly into the sci-fi. When consecutive mass murders occur across the globe, the human race begins to fall apart. No terrorist organisations take responsibility, so the general public jump to conclusions.As you can probably guess, it’s the wrong conclusion. I mean who would guess that hybrid humans had infiltrated the human race and had positioned themselves in positions of power. They were so human that they walked among us and no one knew.

So the premise is quite strong and rather unique, I mean hybrid sleeper agents, mixed with the FBI and mass murder shootings of random people. It’s high stakes, the FBI pulsing with tension at wanting to capture the killers and work out who is behind the killings. Right?

Wrong!

For Jack and his colleague Lauren, they seemed almost incapable of functioning without fantasising about screwing each others brains out. Does this seem a little off? I thought so. I mean, I’m all for a bit of sexual tension…

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But sometimes you may find yourself in the most inappropriate place to be thinking those thoughts AND if they keep occurring, one would surely act upon them to get them out of your system before they start interfering with you work?! No? Am I alone in this?

Well, it seems I must be, because Jack and Lauren have vivid fantasies about each other and ooze sexual tension that is blatantly obvious to everyone around them for quite a large part of the book.

My issues with the messed up infatuation between our main characters aside, the story actually progressed quite well. The plot twists was complicated enough that they seemed plausible, but not too complicated they were completely left field.

The ending held a rather pertinent message for the human race: take care of our planet, it’s the only one we have.

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It was a little buried in the ending, but I think it finally shone through.

This book needs a heavy edit. The issues below were just the most glaringly obvious. If little things like that bother you, perhaps wait for an updated version.

Some things I noticed:

4% – Ugh! Please tell me this pussyfooting around the sexual desire isn’t going to be the main focus…

10% – blond, not blonde when referring to Stacey.

19% – No (one) had seen her…
…he didn’t even tell with (delete with) his parents…

21% – …and (t)his might be her only…

25% – why does he think that at the start of chapter 15? It seems so out of character!

27% – … No matter how much (delete much add many) times he massaged…

32% – She(‘d) never felt so alone…

33% – check or cheque?

50% – It made sense as hundreds if them and (delete and add had) been taken…

53% – It warmed Lauren'(s) heart and…

57% – …as much (delete much, add many) people as possible…

64% – …rubbing the nibbles (nipples) with his thumb…

66% – …and has to be rebuilt it (delete it) from scratch.

69% – …what they were planned (planning) to do…

82% – …people who had (been) unable to make…

83% – …to bolt of(f) her chair…

91% – …broke into piece(s) but it also…

97% – …not safe for (her) here.
…she made was (delete was, add were) for you.

**Note: I was provided an electronic copy of this book in return for an honest review**

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2 thoughts on “Review: Smokescreen

  1. Chuckling over the ‘nibble’ typo. 🙂

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