Review: Love, life and everything else


LifeLoveAndEverythingElse

one-star-rating

Read on August 15, 2014

Recommended for: Anyone who wants some editing practice

Synopsis: Meet Sarah, a nine-year old girl with a talent for painting and an adoptive family who supports her in everything she does. She lives a happy life with her foster-father who is her idol and her foster-mother who loves her unconditionally. Little does she know that her past will come back to haunt her and an atrocity that happened nine-year ago would come to light. What will be Sarah’s reaction when she is subjected to a past that she has no knowledge of?

Sandy is scared, worried and somewhat irritated because of the weird voices she hears from the attic above. With the help of her best friend, Anne, she decides to find out the source of this all racket but what will she find hidden up there? Would the truth shock her?

Will the frail, old and lonely novelist who had managed to incur an emotion so inside him be able to change the course of his life?

Self-made and hardworking Jenny was looking forward to the opening ceremony of her novel when she is subjected to the hatred and scorn of her best friend, Cindy and made a laughingstock in town. Will Jenny be able to hold her head high?

Bookish things: 32 pages. The cover is quite nice, though I’m not sure what it has to do with any of the stories.

Where to buy: Amazon on kindle for $0.91 or paperback for $5.09

My review: 

Love, life and everything needs an editor. It needs an editor like the flowers need the bees to help pollinate them.

The language used is clunky, words and phrases are reused too close to each other, tenses are changed within the same sentences and paragraphs.

The poor writing aside, the stories are mere slivers of stories. The ideas are there, but they don’t have enough substance to be worth reading.

Take the first story: Abandoned in the Alley, the story was fraught with plot holes. When finding an abandoned child in an alley, rather than take it to a hospital and the police, our character takes the child to her orphanage and raises the child as her own – wrong!

This is but one of many plot holes and inaccuracies that plague this collection of short stories.

I’m not sure if the other reviewers got another version of this book, but I can’t understand how it has 5 star reviews with so many fundamentals of writing misused or not used at all!

A few things I noticed:

4% – alley is used too much in the first paragraph.

6% – a deafening silence ensued after the hooded figure left was broken when a car rushed through the alley – what?

I stopped listing them after this… It was just too much.

**Note: I was provided an electronic copy of this book in return for an honest review**

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